Hey Deborah, no more butt kicking please. I got my one pager in first!
Just kidding. See you guys on Saturday and best wishes to Deborah on her upcoming trip to England.
Gerry! You crack me up. 😉 This outline looks really good and feels streamlined in ways that make the storyline come through much clearer. One question: In the first paragraph, I’m still slightly unclear on how Greg and Ben are connected to the events in the first sentence. Can you cast that first sentence through Greg’s POV? Also, the last paragraph is meant to suggest a cliffhanger, correct? One thought on this is that the first book should end on a small “win” for the hero, even though the bad guys get away and are still on the loose. Is there some reward for Greg, at least in the short term, that solves one of the main mysteries/problems of this book (or at least appears that way)? Then readers will see that he may have one victory, but we’ll know he’ll be back for more (in the next book) because the bigger work is still undone.
Good points. I do need to work on it more. My first draft was like 570 words so I really had to edit it down and I think I lost some in the editing. I got it with connecting Greg and Benjamin to the first sentence. They were in charge of the police at the scene. Go figure, I left that out for sure. Duh! As for Greg at the end, he is winning as he got back his command and he has been looking for Mari since she went underground without clues to her whereabouts. Finding her hideout even though she escapes, is a major step forward. I’ll definitely clean that up.
See everyone tomorrow and thanks Monique!
Nicely done, Deborah. I think for the sake of simplicity, what you have done by spelling out her story in a linear fashion makes good sense. I think you capture good details in where she goes and what she does that give a sense of what kind of adventures she’ll have and what the subject matter of the middle of the story (her “adventure”) will be. One note, is to take a look at the order of beats in that last sentence: Perhaps the order is that she finally learns what she needs to be a strong and independent woman (first), which is what ultimately allows her to build the family of her own (last).
I found thirty two authors that I think fit my book’s profile: Fiction, Mysteries &Thrillers, you know, cop or detective stuff, usually in a series of books. I’m building a spreadsheet with the info found in my research, like Monique’s spreadsheet. But in my research I have located a couple of on-line resources that may be helpful in identifying agents for authors and publishers. The resources are: publishersmarketplace.com and literarymarketplace.com. I signed up for publishersmarketplace.com and it costs about $26.00 per month. literarymarketplace.com is quite a bit more expensive, about $25.00 per week or $400++ per year, so I’m holding off on literarymarketplace.com for now even though I think it may be more comprehensive. I will share what I have found at our next meeting or write-in. Sorry I missed Wednesday’s write-in.
Hi Gerry, these are good resources you’ve found online. I will be curious to see what you get with a membership at publishers marketplace. It’s my understanding that it’s a site with trade industry news more geared for those working within the industry. I would think much of the content relevant for authors would be also available free elsewhere. See https://www.publishersweekly.com/ for example. I’ll also post these links on our resources page.
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