Deborah, much clearer, and good job of putting Annie in the driver’s seat for this pass. One note here is that we don’t really know who Deb is to Annie until Ch. 18. Upon first mention in Ch. 2, see if you can include a little bit of description that lets us understand the nature of their relationship. (For example, Annie arrives in … with Deb, her 16-year-old charge…). Fantastic job. You have a really strong tool now that you can refer to in multiple ways.
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